[Tranc{E]nd} ([info]seattlesque) wrote,
@ 2004-08-03 14:20:00
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MYSTERY (poem)
MYSTERY

I placed a box
inside another
one box showed
one box covered

one secret's mine
one not revealed
the inner box
by others sealed




If I pack a box, I know a "secret" because I know what I put in it. Yet because we are always operating using parts that we did not design at some level (atoms, if nothing else)...then I don't necessarily know all the properties of the things in the box. Thus, my own box is a mystery even to me.

I intended this as a quick capture of the impossibility of making a work that is not derivative. I am using the language of "boxes" and "seals", because lately a lot of my thinking of the design of ideal systems has had to do with "shrinkwrapping" and digital signing. Yet the notion applies to any creative work, like this poem itself being composed of words whose connotations I don't entirely know.

Increasingly I have wondered about "open-source art"...the idea that artists would be willing to speak to their composition process, while not limiting the interpretive freedom that others would have of the work.



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[info]gustavolacerda
2004-08-05 08:08 am UTC (link)
I find it surprising how little artists build on each others' specific works. The copying of higher-level styles / themes seems to be ok though, but not specific stories / pictures... except in music.

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Nested nestlings
[info]fdmts
2004-08-06 09:20 am UTC (link)

Slashdot article about a Wired article about an anonymous networking protocol called TOR.

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Here's one
[info]contrarydevil
2005-01-07 08:43 am UTC (link)
I took a moment from my day
wrapped it up in things you say
mailed it off to your address
you'll get it pretty soon unless

The packaging begins to break
and all the points I tried to make
are tossed with thoughts into a bin
time leaks out my life leaks in

you won't find moments in a box
and someone else will set your clocks
I took a moment from my day
wrapped it up in things you say
and mailed it off to you

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boxes, cloxes, and S. always a critic
[info]seattlesque
2005-01-07 10:47 pm UTC (link)
Similar theme. I'm hardly one to make the "too singsong" critique (since I'm always enforcing rhyme / pattern). But I'll suggest that in a rhyme scheme if it's TOO obvious what the word is going to be each time, it's fun to twist things until the obviousness goes away:

Took from my day a moment that
in terms you've set I chose to wrap
then mailed it off to your address
you'll get it pretty soon...UNLESS


When the rhyme words start getting a little too predictable (from my DAY...things you ___), there's often a way to say the same thing that's a little more fun. Also, when you're wiring your verses funny like this...it permits a bit more dramatic reading despite being every bit as "rhymey". You can sing song it, or you can break it other places:

Took from my day a moment...
that in terms you've set, I chose to wrap
THEN mailed it off to your address.
You'll get it pretty soon.

Unless the packaging (...)


Thank you for sharing, hello's to you and the pajamasaur.

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