[Tranc{E]nd} (seattlesque) wrote,
[Tranc{E]nd}
seattlesque

GREEN (poem)

GREEN

from out of a keyhole
too long look-ed through
came an inkling that inkled
(as inklings oft do)

and I knew then I'd lost it
distracted because
of the has that had been
and the never that was

this reflection I share
with the man in my car
it's best not to know
how unhappy you are




Looking through a keyhole for too long is a good way of conveying the idea of focusing on somewhere you can't get to and are only seeing a tiny bit of, but being obsessed with that unattainable place. I've been looking for a place to put "the has that had been and the never that was," because I like the past tense formation of "has-beens" and "never-was". Continuing the theme of "grass-is-greener" it shows someone torn up and driven insane by the idea of what they'd had before and the idea of what they'll never have. The double meaning of "sharing a reflection" suggests that he and the man in his car are the same person. Not knowing how unhappy you are has that "things that make you go hmmm" aspect to it. ("Stanley, you don't want to know." - "Then why'd I ask?" UHF)
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